Deadfall

[Moonfish]

Very nice DJ.... I can smell napalm I mean talent here,

keep it up.

Moonfish

[Nea]

wow, that was really good story dj u are pretty badass

[Fsteckler]

Very well written! You have a lot of neat subtle things going on here. Very easy to read. I look forward to more

[dj.]

Originally Posted by Fsteckler

Very well written! You have a lot of neat subtle things going on here. Very easy to read. I look forward to more

Wow thanx!!

Wish I could have padded it out some more now, added more detail.

I am very lazy, just think 'bah, they will know what I mean'

But then, people DO take a very simple story line and make a bloody novel out of it

My intention was short and sweet, would like to write again, will try to be less lazy next time, but add more content, without writing too much, fine line I guess.

[Johned]

Had not seen this before. I liked it, did not go the direction I thought it would as I as reading.

[dj.]

Originally Posted by Johned

Had not seen this before. I liked it, did not go the direction I thought it would as I as reading.

at your rep to me

Touche