3rd Weekly EF Haiku Contest "HaikEU"

[dataspice]

Boarded the spaceship-
He said, "Sit anywhere." -- "Oh?"
"Get out of my chair!"

[Dextar]

Originally Posted by dataspice

Boarded the spaceship-
He said, "Sit anywhere." -- "Oh?"
"Get out of my chair!"

WOOT!

We have our 5th Qualified Entry!

Well done!

The monkeys shall now dance!

(Good Luck dataspice!)

(Oh noes more non-stop giggles )

[Oleg]

Originally Posted by dataspice

Boarded the spaceship-
He said, "Sit anywhere." -- "Oh?"
"Get out of my chair!"

I love this one, it reminds me of something Ivor Cutler would do. If you know who he is, imagine it with his voice

[Blinding Light]

Club Neverdie, Sky High

Killing mobs for Uber loots, I try

Elusive Globals

[Dextar]

Originally Posted by Blinding Light

Club Neverdie, Sky High
Killing mobs for Uber loots, I try
Elusive Globals

Excellent Imagery Blinding however your syllable count is off on lines 1 & 2. Haiku format is exactly 17 syllables in 3 lines, the format is as follows:

Line 1 = 5 syllables
Line 2 = 7 syllables
Line 3 = 5 syllables

Please do Try again, your imagery is very good, just rework it to fit the format and you are good to go. Make a new post. Don 't edit your original post. (you can use same idea but it needs to be in a new post because of the rules and the contest being limited to 20 qualified entires)

Dex

[kalanen]

This violates rule #7 (and therefore is no real entry), but because it's A: first known haiku in calypsian language and B: most beautiful haiku in whole universe, i'll post it and it's rough translation here:

ba bui bubibi
biu bui bubibu bibu
bui bu nonono!

Translation:
Traded sweat and dung
for cnd ticket but that
fu**ing git gave me jester bp

(yes, traditional calypsian is very compact language)

[Blinding Light]

I dont think the syllables are off.

Club. Never.die, Sky. High. 5

Killing. mobs. for. Uber. loots., I. try. 7

E.lu.sive Glo.bals 5

Broken into syllable form. Periods are where I have the syllable broken into...

[Dextar]

Originally Posted by Blinding Light

I dont think the syllables are off.

Club. Never.die, Sky. High. 5

Killing. mobs. for. Uber. loots., I. try. 7

E.lu.sive Glo.bals 5

Broken into syllable form. Periods are where I have the syllable broken into...

Line one: Club = 1, NeverDie = 3 (pronounced: Ne-ver-die), Sky = 1, High =1 add them up and total is 6.

Line two: Killing =2 (pronounced Kill-ing), mobs = 1, for = 1, Uber =2 (pronounced U-ber), loots =1, I =1, try=1 add them up total is 9.

Last line you have right.

Also the syllable counter confirms the above.

Dex

[Dextar]

The monkeys are sad...

no new entries to dance for...

they sit in a corner and brood...

won't someone make the monkeys dance?

think of the children...



Dex

[dataspice]

When monkeys don't dance, the terrorists win.